Bac notion "Mythes et héros"

Bonsoir,
A l'approche de mon oral d'anglais (Bac) mercredi prochain, je vous soumets mes différents textes portant chacun sur une des 3 notions que nous avons vues.
Il ne devrait pas y avoir trop de fautes, je pense cependant que certaines tournures de phrases sont maladroites ou que des fautes concernant les temps sont présentes.
Merci de votre aide !
Myths and Heroes
Myths and Heroes are included in each country's culture. They can be imaginary or historic. We studied in class some of the England's queens : Queen Elizabeth , Queen Victoria and Queen Elizabeth 2. Each of them got a different image from the people. Who are these monarchs beyond the representation we've got from them? In this talk, I will try first to show you that they had different plans for England's future. Then I will study their position as female monarchs and finally I will speak about how they managed to get a private life while they had also to run the empire.
First, we studied some representations which have been comissioned by each of these queens. The first one which represents Queen Elizabeth shows an impression of power. We can see on the top hand left corner and on the top hand right corner some English victories. The queen has also her hand on a globe. Therefore we can conclude that she wants England to conquer lands. The second one is more moderated. The queen is shown as imposant. She seems more to aim to keep the empire than to grew it. The last one is shown as a simple person. She seems more close to her people than the others. Therefore, we can see that their reign's objectives are different.
Then, these monarchs are females. Queen Elizabeth was the first queen. Therefore, her accession has been seen by the people as a bad thing. She was allowed to give orders to men, which couldn't be possible for many because running the kingdom was a men job at that time. She has disturbed the tradition. Another text that we studied shows us the event of Edward's birth. His birth enabled England not to get a war. Elizabeth was born, but we can see that the people was waiting for a son and didn't care about Elizabeth. However during her reign, she has managed to show her people that she was able to run the country. About Queen Elizabeth II, who's still alive, the things have changed. Indeed, today, the succession on the throne is for the most aged child of the royal family. Boy or girl, there is no difference.
We know many things about who were the queens. But what about their private life? How have they managed to get a private life while they had also to success in politic ?
We studied in class a text about the relationship between Queen Victoria and Abdul Karim, one of her greatest friend, who was Indian. When the queen died, the successor ordered Karim to return in India. One of the reasons was that the English were feared by the India Independance. Therefore, we can see that their politic life and private life are linked. Can a queen have friends ?
Thanks to the same text, we know that the Munshi helped Victoria to understand India (by its language, its culture...), which was a English territory. Munshi was a kind of ambassador of India. In this case, Victoria was able to take good decisions for this country. Abdul Karim was living at Buckingam Palace so he could help the Queen very often.
As a conclusion, females monarchs have managed to get a major role in the England's kingdom. Each of them made England take a different way by conquering lands or just running the empire. However, their life is not so enviable because of their public life which encroach on their private life. In the future, when Queen Victoria 2nd die, the United Kingdoms will get back to a king.