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Qui pourra me corriger mon texte en anglais svp ?

Voilà mon texte ;

Once upon a time, in a sumptuous palace, hidden in the forest, there lived a princess named Anastasia Brussels. She had a rare beauty and she was always beautifully dressed. Between all these suitors, she chose a handsome young knight of the castle courtyard, named Louis. This beautiful jumper was madly in love with Princess Anastasia but he could not marry the princess because of their social differences.
But one day, when the beautiful Anastasia was walking in the forest, she met an ugly old woman. She approached her and Anastasia had not even had time to speak to him that the old woman slammed her fingers. Suddenly, the two women found themselves in an old cabin.
For two days, King Charles 1 was worried and decided to send a rider traverse the forest to find her daughter. Indeed, the rider was designated Louis. After long hours covered in this damp, dark forest, Louis met an ogre and asked him if he had not seen a pretty woman nearby. The ogre replied that there was nobody in this corner of the forest and added it may be that the old witch removed.
The monster explained that he did not touch passers sound he removed the children to eat them.
While the witch was amused to remove passersby to make potions tests and spells on them.
The young rider asked where the old woman lived and the ogre showed him the way.
So Louis was eager to meet his sweetheart, he galloped quickly and came to the house of the witch. Louis suddenly went well and saw that his beloved who was tied up.
Immediately, Louis took a huge book on the table, he threw on the old woman. The cruel witch does not react because she had more strength and she was exhausted after using all his energy in preparing potions. While the old witch was trying to utter a magic formula to avoid the book, the rider quickly untied the princess and both fled on the back of the horse waiting outside the hut. In return, King Charles 1 congratulated and rewarded the brave Louis Cavalier with a collar Or. Finally, the beautiful princess Anastasia Brussels and the beautiful rider Louis were married, they had many children and lived happily!

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Nathea
Bonjour !
 
Once upon a time, a princess named Anastasia was living in a sumptuous castle hidden in the forest. She was of rare beauty and always beautifully dressed. Among all her suitors (pretenders), she chose a handsome young knight of the courtyard of the King (je préfère rajouter Roi, parce que court yard = cour intérieure...comme une cour de récré ), named Louis. This good-looking rider (beautiful est vraiment trop "femme" pour la beauté comme "pretty") was madly in love with  princess.Anastasia but he couldn't marry her because of their different social status (rank). But , one day, as princess Anastasia was going for    a walk in the forest, ( to go for a walk = aller se promener), she met an ugly woman . She went close to her, and before Anastasia had time to talk to her, she had slammed her fingers  (slam = claquer ????) Pourquoi tu as mis speak to him ??? erreur où j'ai loupé quelque chose ??). Suddenly, the two women found themselves  in an old cabin (hut).
For two days King Charles 1 was worried and finally decided to send  a
knight in search of his daughter around the lands and the forest.He sent 
actually the handsome Louis. After long hours wandering (errant) in this
damp and dark forest, he met an ogre. He asked him if he hadn't seen
a pretty woman nearby. The ogre answered nobody was living in this part of the forest but added the witch might have kidnapped her (remove = enlever ses mains de sa poche par ex ou du vernis à ongles).

Les 2 phrases d'après, je suis pas sûr du tout de les comprendre surtout "didn't touch passers sound"....????? re-écris les en français stp en comment)
The young Louis (rider..comme tu veux) asked where the old woman was living, and the ogre showed him the way. Louis was so eager to meet
his beloved (bienaimée), that he galoped very quickly and arrived to the witch's house. Louis  (went well = alla bien  ?? si oui -->) suddenly felt better when he saw Anastasia even if she was tied up.
Immediatly, Louis took a huge book on the table and threw it at the old woman's face. The cruel witch didn't react ..après c'est contradictoire:
elle a plus de force mais elle est fatiguée ????le quel des 2? J'invente et tu verras si ça te va / The cruel witch didn't react beacause  she still had strength, but in the same time, she was exhausted for having prepared all her potions, she didn't have much energy left. She tried to utter a magic formula to avoid the book, Louis quickly untied Anastasia and both fled on the back of the horse. King Charles 1 congratulated and rewarded  the brave kinght Louis with a  ?????.
Finally the beautiful princess Anastasia and the handsome knight Louis got married . They had lots of children and lived happily !!


j'ai surtout modifié des tournures de phrases pour alléger certaines parties du textes et changer des mots comme "remove" qui veut dire enlever mais pas dans le sens que tu voulais ......
Les 2 phrases du milieu, pas vraiment compris ni collar Or.

Bonne soirée

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