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Bonjour j'ai besoin d'aide pour corriger un texte que j'ai écrit sur l'école idéal et si possible l'améliorer. Merci d'avance !
Voici ce que j'ai écrit : What is for you Ideal school ?
For me the ideal school is a school where is a new mentality. In this school all students respect the teachers, and especially the other students. Indeed nobody would be rejected or insulted because he is different or more harder to school. In addition in this school there would be different students and no more « sheeps » who follows somebody or who does something ( which is sometimes dangerous ) to be « cool ». Moreover in the Ideal school there would be this bad competitive spirit which pushes some students to destroy themselves or to be individualistic. A competitive spririt created by a school system that I find unfair. Effectively if soemone has good marks he will be considered « better », despite a student who makes the best of himself and who fails he will be considered « not clever ». To quote Einstein’s words « we can’t judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, ortherwise he will think all his life he is stupid. ». Further this ideal school would have good buildings to work.
So, the ideal school is principalement a new mentality, not the using of new technology or beautiful buildings.


Sagot :

Bonjour,
For me the ideal school is a school where there is  new mentality. In this school all students respect the teachers, and especially the other students. Indeed nobody would be rejected or insulted because he or she is different or more harde working at school. In addition in this school there would be different students and no more « sheeps » who follows somebody or who does something ( which is sometimes dangerous ) to be « cool ». Moreover in the Ideal school there would be this bad competitive spirit which pushes some students to destroy themselves or to be individualistic. A competitive spirit created by a school system that I find unfair. Effectively if someone has good marks he will be considered « better », despite a student who makes the best of himself and who fails he will be considered « not clever ». To quote Einstein’s words « we can’t judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, ortherwise he will think all his life he is stupid. ». Further this ideal school would have good buildings to work. 
So, the ideal school is principalement a new mentality, not the using of new technology or beautiful buildings.
voila , je t'ai corrige quelque faute de grammaire et d'orthographe, j'espère t'avoir aide ! et très bon texte ! bravo !