It's good however, dialogue/speech in English is written like this:
"Hi, I'm Johnny Knoxville and welcome to Jackass" said the narrator.
"What is love?" he said.
The narrator said "Hi, I'm Johnny Knoxville and welcome to Jackass".
He said "What is love?".
When writing a dialogue with only two people, you can sometimes write it like:
"Hello, how are you?" said John.
"I'm fine, you?" said Jane.
"I've had a terrible day"
"What a pity"
You can remove the said x part in this type of situations.
Also, rotate the images correctly before you upload them. Otherwise, I have to constantly turn my head when reading them.
