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Bonjour,
J'ai un devoir d'anglais à l'oral et avant tout j'ai rédigé le contenu. Bien sur le texte est rempli de fautes alors si une personne forte en anglais pourrait le corriger mes fautes ça serait super :) !
On doit écrire quelque chose sur un aventurier alors ne faites pas attention au contenu :).
Texte:
Hello,
I will introduce you to an American adventurer. His name is Aron Ralston ans he is nos 41 years old. Aron Ralston was bien on October 27 the 1975 (Je sais pas comment formuler la date). He is of American nationality. Aron Ralston became famous in May 2003 when he was stuck in a canyon during a hike. He must amputate his arm with a knife in order to escape from the canyon.
Aron Ralston is a mountaineer and a engineer. In 2002 he leaves his work to continue his passion in the mountains. Aron Ralston loves hiking and mountaineering. In 2003, Aron Ralston was hiking alone in Blue John Canyon but while he was descending a slot canyon, a suspended rock fell on his hand and crushed his right hand. He is blocked and nobody can come to his help. It has only 1 liter of water and 2 cereal bar. During six days and five nights, Aron Ralston tries to get out but it's not possible to travel the rock. After 2 days, he starts to become crazy and after 4 days it records a Farewell message with a camera. It's after 5 days that he has the idea to cut his arm but his knife can't cut his bone. So Aron Ralston decide to break the bone to cut the arm. After 1 hour and 5 minutes, he is released and he run away from the canyon. After that, he walks five hours under the sun. Then he meets a family and he is taken to the hospital by helicopter. He wrote a book called "Between a Rock and a Hard Place" after his story in the canyon. In 2010 this book is adapted to the cinema, the film is titled 127 hours. Now Aron Ralston continues to make adventure in the mountains and it is returned more than 10 times to the canyon where he almost died. In 2009 he is married with Jessica Trusty and in 2010 he had a child.
Voilà :)!
Bien évidemment ceci est une description simpliciste de sa vie et de son histoire !
Merci.
Quelques corrections : and he is 41 years old /was born on October 27, 1975/ He is American/ In May 2003,he was hiking when Ecris ton texte au passé et non au présent .Essaie de ne pas utiliser wikipédia
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