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Bonsoir , svp pouvez vous me corriger cela svp : Sur la partie développement il faut que je face un résumé du texte et et conclusion faut que je donne mon avis puis je dois faire une ouverture  INTRODUCTION

 

  This article was
published in August 2011 in the Fast Company news paper . It was written by the
journalist Kit Eaton . Its tittle is 
« If you Apply for a Job , Censor your FB page » .   The journalist speaks about the fact
that  social networks have both negative
and positive  effects on hiring .

 

 


 


DEVELOPPEMENT

 

 

An employer use 
social networks such as  Facebook
to  choose if an employee will be hired
or not .  An employers examine internet
on a employee when a look that people puts racists  inapropriate rude comments about on the
former collegue , when the people puts the damaging photos of them , yes the
people drink more , yes a druger addict  . An employer also can verified yes a job
candidate is solid communication skills , written grammar  or no . This elements allow the employeur to
identify an employee on the image which he clears on the Internet and according
to the image that he sends back the candidate will be hired or not .  The journalist give the example of one
psychiatrist which not do have hiring in the hospital for his reasons .

 

 


 
CONCLUSION

 

The social networks took a very big importance in the
company what is not it seems to me a good thing because

















a employer go into our personnal life to destroy a
career .

Bonsoir Svp Pouvez Vous Me Corriger Cela Svp Sur La Partie Développement Il Faut Que Je Face Un Résumé Du Texte Et Et Conclusion Faut Que Je Donne Mon Avis Puis class=

Sagot :

J'aurai mis :

>> was been published
>> the journalist wrote [il ne parle pas mais écrit]
>> enlèves le "both" parce que t'as pas deux compléments de sujet
>> useS
>> an employer [pas de S]
>> examines
>> aN employee
>> racist [pas de S aux aux adjectifs]
>> about the [pas de "on", je ne suis pas sûre]
>> pas "verified" mais "CHECK"
>> enlève le "yes"
>> dernière phrase du paragraphe : which hasn't been hired [je ne connais pas le participe de ce verbe la désolée]
>> THESE reasons
>> take et non "took"
>> goes

Après je pense que tu devrais vraiment changer "employee" et "employer" parce que je suis pas sûre que ce soient les réels termes en anglais !

INTRODUCTION
This article was published on August 2011 in the Fast Company news paper . It was written by the journalist Kit Eaton . The tittle is « If you Apply for a Job , Censor your FB page » . The journalist speaks about the fact that social networks have both negative and positive effects on hiring .
DEVELOPPEMENT
An employer uses social networks such as Facebook to verify or check on an employee and decide if he or she could be hired or not . An employer makes a research on the internet  about an employee for varoius reasos such as : to find out if the canditate puts racists, inapropriate or  rude  comments about a former collegue , if the candidate puts obscene photos of them , if the candidate is a drunkard or a drug addict . An employer can also verify if the job candidate has  solid communication skills , writing skills etc... These elements allow the employeur to identify an employee on the image he or she shares on the Internet and also helps the employer to decide if the candidate is eligible to be hired or not . The journalist gives an example of a psychiatrist who did not hire a candidtae after going through the profile of the person on the social network page.
CONCLUSION 
 Lately the social networks took a very big importance while hiring candidates by the companies , but to me it does not seem to be a good thing because an employer can through the personnal life of an employee and thus destroy his or her career .

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