Pouvez-vous corriger les erreurs d’orthographe et de syntaxe de mon texte s'il vous plait ?
Et aussi, si je pourrais éventuellement ajouter des choses ... Merci d'avance. (C'est un commentaire sur une caricature).
Dear editor in chief,
I am writing a comment based on the cartoon that I recently saw in your newspaper.
What I found the most stunning was, contrary to the boy who seems to be quite rich, the girl must be rather poor as she can't afford to buy shoes and What struck me the most was that In Indonesia, poor people work in sweatshops from sunrise to sunset to make this NIKE shoes, and american peoples buy this even when they are unemployed. When I saw it, it made me feel sad, angry and shocked : sad for indonesian girl and the people who are in the same conditions, angry for people who lives in developed country because people who lives in the USA or in a country that have not the same conditions with indonesia are not interested, they work not with the same working conditions.
The two person are teenagers. I imagine the American teenager must be happier than the Asian girl. She must be poorer than him too and also more courageous. The girl work in a sweatshop and we can see that she is tired whereas the boy who seems bored. Unlike to the boy who is jobless, the girl works day in day out, from sunrise to sunset. It's terrible to see a teenager who spoilt 150$ for shoes whereas for the girl, 150$ is so much !
Finally, this cartoon opened my eyes on the inequalities in this world, on the injusticies to the poor and on the spending raised by the people rich.