Besoin d'une correction oral de bac d'ANGLAIS

Bonjour à tous,
dans 1 semaine j'ai mon oral d'anglais. J'ai préparé mes fiches mais je pense que j'ai fait quelques erreurs. Est-ce que quelqu'un de bon en anglais pourrait me corriger mes fautes s'il vous plait ? :)
Mon texte étudie la notion Myths and Hereos

The notion I’m going to deal with is myth and heroes. A myth means legend, but nowadays a myth refers to a popular belief or tradition embodying the ideals and institutions of a society. A hero is a person with superhuman abilities but now refers to a person who is admired for his courage, outstanding achievements or noble qualities. Myths and heroes are present in many societies but they probably have different specificities depending on the cultures. However they have a common point: they permit to have a model, an idea to keep behind. To what extent myths or heroes gather people?
I’m going to start talking about myths and heroes who have been a factor of social cohesion. People need to be unified. They need feeling to belong a group, a community. They are always looking for individual or collective identity. To satisfy it need, the society creates its own myths, incarnations of the values of an era. Indeed the myth carries a cultural identity in which the nation can recognize itself. For example, during the 19th century, the myth of cowboys has been created. The myth of the cowboys was a simple human reality corresponding to a social and economic demand. It became a myth for psychological reasons. Indeed, a rising nation was in search of roots and values, where each and every one could identify with. At the epoch, after the Civil War in 1862, the cities on the East Cost of the United States were depriving of resources whereas in Texas, over 6 million cattle roamed wild. So people needed a hero who could drive that kind of cattle from Texas to the railroad in Kansas. And this hero was named cowboy. The video documentary titled “America, the Story of Us” illustrates the representation of the cowboy like a hero. Indeed, the cowboys face up to a lot of dangers like the rustlers (people who steal the cattle). Then, they have to be brave because the West was wild, vast and lawless. As a result, they have been considered as patriotic heroes because they brought food to people living at east. This myth of cowboys associates a sense of belongings because everyone believes in a same hero which unifies people. That’s why the myth can be a factor of social cohesion.
Now we will see that some heroes have been of its time thanks to the ideas they embodied. Some heroes are admired because of their achievements, or messages. They do courageous things, they fight for something or they want to serve others. They represent a model, an ideal man. For instance, some heroes fought against the racial segregation in the United States, like Rosa Parks, Martin Luther King or Nelson Mandela. Indeed, Martin Luther King was an American icon because he delivered a famous speech “I have a dream” about the freedom of the Negro slaves in 1963. In his speech, he denounces the conditions of the black people in the US in the past and at the time of his speech. Moreover, the wall painting of Mr. Brainwash shows 3 icons: Rosa Parks, Martin Luther King and Barack Obama. These 3 models fought for the equality of black and whites people. They embody symbols. For example, Rosa Parks and Martin Luther King represent the symbol of the struggle against the racial segregation in 50’s; and Barack Obama is the symbol of American Democracy, becoming the first black president. Indeed, Barack Obama rallied American behind its cause. This illustrates the fact that a hero can gather people about values which are the equality and the democracy.
What’s more, Rosa Parks and Martin Luther King are considered as heroes to many people because, before the Civil Rights Movement, when whites were thought to be better than all other races, they decided it was time for change. So they rose peacefully against the Whites: for instance Rosa parks refused to let her seat to a White because she considered that she should have the same rights as the Whites. And Martin Luther King helped her in her struggle and became after the leader of the nonviolent struggle against racial segregation. For people, they are heroes because they fought for their convictions and ideas with determination, courage and devotion. People admire them because they succeed and did what they dreamed, so that these kinds of hero join people about one message.






To conclude, we can say that myths and heroes gather people. Indeed, a myth comes from a social or economic demand, and creates a social cohesion. It’s the same for a hero. Indeed, few persons have a capacity to change the minds of many people, to convey their ideas, their message. They represent a model who people can follow. So people are unified around a same hero.


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