Spaces and exchanges /aide

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Introduction
In order to begin my presentation about Spaces and exchanges, it will be necessary to define what power means. Nowadays, the different spaces of the world are more and more connected to each other. Exchanges can take on many forms : people, trades, informations. Of course, the internet is linked to this notion , thanks to its rise during the last decade.
To what extent does Ireland embody the notion Spaces and Exchanges ?
During the former part, we will see " Bust and immigration", then we will finish with the latter part : " Economic Boom".

I - Bust and immigration

As Donall Mac Amlagh proves it in his history book published in 1978 Britain's Irish Workers, the crisis which occurred during the fifties in Ireland was a traumatize for the country and the people. There was a feeling of desolation in the whole country and Irish were hopeless as far as their future was concerned. He draws a pessimistic portrait of the Irish economic situation.
Indeed, this crisis has forced some Irish to emigrate, as we can see on the tryptic called Emigrant Journey, painted by Bernard Canavan. Canavan decided to paint a group of Irish immigrants leaving their village with all their stuffs, praying, then having an exhausting walk and arriving in a dark city, with another surge of immigrants who were already there. The closer they were to the city, the darker the sky was, showing that even immigrating wasn't such a good idea for those needy and jobless people.
Consequently, migrations from rural exodus are very important exchanges in the world. Those exchanges establish a link between the spaces and, after all, it is the people who make the exchanges around the world.
But if people decide to emigrate in order to try their luck abroad and to start from scratch, they never do it without any twinge.
As an instance, Jobless Paddy, a high qualified Irish who had been jobless for almost one year, posted a poster in the streets of Dublin with this title : " Save me from Emigration », showing that Emigration was more a constraint than something done by lightheartedly. He wished he could have stayed in Ireland to fuel the growth of his country.
However, immigration has also a lot of positive aspects. As we saw it in the English newspaper The Economist, the article entitled Border Follies tends to show that emigration is a good thing for both emigrants and host countries, with a growth of the GDP and of the productivity, and emigration seems to be easier than in the tryptic.
Given that a lot of Irish decided to emigrate because of the crisis which occurred in the fifties, a huge economic boom happened, revitalizing the economy.

II - Economic boom

Irish immigrants who had gone because of the crisis gradually began to come back in Ireland when they heard about the economic boom in the nineties.
All of them are glad to come back in their native country. On an audio recording, then insist on the fact that they come back for themselves, and for Ireland.
Thus, Ireland became a melting pot. People have a high purchasing power and a lot of strangers decided to settle in Ireland, Dublin was living on a constant party mode.
On a photograph, there are three children coming from different countries, showing that a lot of different nationalities live together in Ireland, sharing their culture.
There is a huge contrast with the tryptic and the Irish who were living their country.
Ireland has become a cultural space with a lot of exchanges. It's now an important country in a globalized world, with humans exchanges between a lot of countries.
But Ireland has also became an economic space. By giving advantages to the foreigners companies which pay low taxes, like Apple, Ireland is more and more integrated with globalization. We can say that it's Ireland boom which made the Irish going back to their country.
But, as it is shown by Dermot Bolger in The Parting Glass, Ireland wasn't enough ready to welcome all those migrants and the crisis came back anew : it was the end of the Celtic Tiger and Irish leave Ireland once again. It is like a vicious circle.

Conclusion

As a conclusion, we can truly say that Ireland is representative of this globalized world in which we live, a world made of exchanges which link the spaces together.
All flows are linked together : trades, people. But those flows don't go by all the countries, and consequently, some are neglected, creating a lot of differences.