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Corriger un texte d'anglais pour un oral:
Bonsoir,
J'ai un oral d'anglais bientot et j'aimerais savoir si quelqu'un pourrais corriger mon texte.
Je suis pas très forte en anglais
Merci d'avance.
Voici le texte:
Good afternoon I'm Diane and I'd like to give my opinion about the radio file which i was listening.
In this two countries we have differents ways to spy on people.
First i think it's too much.
Everything is controlled by the government. The state has becoming a kind of dictatorship.
For example when you drive, walk or go shopping you are observed. Freedom of thought, of expression, of speech and of worship are censured or monitored since in Obey's billboard.
People haven't got privacy and the government says to justify themselves that "it's to reduce crimes".
On the other hand, when the parents say to their children that if they are not wise or nice they will be punished by the elves.
I believe that a good idea to prepare them of their future life with cctv camera or the thought police . But they will be not able to make difference between good or bad.
To conclude i against this idea of watching everything because people need a private life even if it's for a good cause.
Thanks and goodbye.

Sagot :

Good afternoon! I'm Diane and I'd like to give my opinion about the radio file which i was listening.
In this two countries we have different ways to spy on people.
First I think it's too much.
Everything is controlled by the government. The state has become a kind of dictatorship.
For example, when you drive, walk or go shopping, you are observed. Freedom of thought, of expression, of speech and of worship are censured or monitored since in Obey's billboard.
People doesn't have their privacy and the government justifies itself by saying that it's "in order reduce crimes". 
On the other hand, parents say to their children that if they are not wise or nice they will be punished by the elves.
I believe that cctv cameras are a good way to help them for their future. Nevertheless, the government wouldn't be able to understand what is good or bad
To sum up, I totally refute the idea of watching everything because people need a private life even if it's for a good cause.
Thanks and goodbye.
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