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bonjour ! je voudrais savoir si mon texte a un sens (si des phrases ne sont pas bonnes, veuillez me corriger svp)
"I would like to go at the 5th Avenue because it's the most expensive and best shopping streets in the world (many malls that I love are without a doubt there) and i'm crazy about doing shops (like all the teenage girls). also, I would like to go at The Metropolitan Art Museum because I love art, and it's the biggest museum of art in the world. I really would like to see my favorite band at The Lincoln Center. And the place seems great. I would like to visit Times Square at night, it looks awesome with the billboards, and Times Square is called "The Crossroad of the world" or "The Center of the Universe". It sounds good, right ? After, I would like to go at Central Park, I like walking into parks. That park is the most visited urban park with 778 acres. It's cool. me who like parks, i would be served. And to finish, I would like to go at the Museum of Natural History, there are so many specimens of plants and animals ! it's awesome, isn't it ? "

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Deskgeek
i can rewrite it in another way           PS: you didnt write  the introduction and .. you write like youre telling a story not a pargraph ... eachers dont like that way you must avoide that kind of expressing

"" to entertain myself in the weekend, I’ve decided to make a plane where i programmed visiting my favourite places. as a girl I’m obsess with shopping as any girl so i would like to go to the 5th avenue it's the most known shopping street in the world where i can buy all the famous fashion  brands , i would like to go to the metropolitan art museum because of my  tendency to art and creativity i heard that it's the biggest art museum in the world . i would like to go to other places like Lincoln centre to watch my favourite band and get some fun too .i would also visit the time square or crossroad as it called , or centre of universe as other might say ..I’m not finished yet  i will go the central park it a huge  public garden with 778 acres ad i will end my journey by going to the museum of natural history where i could satisfy my curiosity about plants and animal species ... it look like my dream plan i would enjoy so much 
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